Wow. I really, really liked this. I was immediately invested and interested in the characters - whoever they were - and I was really wanting them together at the end. I think that says a lot about your talent in writing, when I can feel this way about characters that are a part of an original story that's just over 3500 words long.

Just a note for you though, there were a few little spelling mistakes:
- you stumble on the stars outside the elegant apartment; should be "stairs", right?

- he exaggerates the accent in purpose; "on" purpose?

Anyway, this was fablous! I really loved it!