ext_31883 ([identity profile] swedish15.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] nekare 2007-07-14 06:54 am (UTC)

Sorry, I was feeling a bit under the weather yesterday night, when I finally could read the entry.

Thingies of the beta-reader nature that has become a second one to me:
"You don’t tell anyone, because he intrigues you more that his lie bothers you." s/that/ /than/

"he excuses himself from hunting with the men with the excuse"
Quite a lot of excuses.

Back to the review!
Interesting; I'm a sucker for romance, and in a way, these two are perfectly fitting, especially since we never know any name of theirs. I like her deciding for him in the end; I like him realizing *how* he likes her. I don't like the husband, but well, in those times, a marriage wasn't always by choice. (Replace wasn't always with always never was) I'd like to know where his money comes from, however; is he wealthy, or what? I wish them best of luck, and I thank you for an interesting read.

/me likes. Big time.

//You could, btw, take a look at the latest post for my apocalypse-blog; I'd like feedback from multilingual people.

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